chui Posted October 25, 2007 Posted October 25, 2007 (edited) well...i know ive posted a bit of fiction and sketching here...but really and truly, that is not my first love...im not really an artist, even though i love art, and im a writer for the love of it...at heart......im a poet... i dont generally let people read my poetry...but i thought i'd post this one...its short, and just how i see and feel a sneeze....this may seem stupid, but bear with me...take a moment....think of the building of a sneeze....think of the rising urgency....the intense sensation that forces its way through....the complete loss of control...the release...think of that when you read.....the winds of change blow,pricking the senses and awakening sensations,the errant release purges forth,rushing with the loss of control,stemming from the hidden places,flushing the skin with tangible emotion,warmth flowing from deep within,spreading the shudder to the ends,shaking the core and forging a desperate cry...a breath of sound escaping....when the tremor ends...all is a blessing.i hope you enjoyed it. this is a sneeze through the eyes and mind of chui.... Edited October 25, 2007 by chui
Geist Posted October 25, 2007 Posted October 25, 2007 MWHAWHAHAAA! That's so deceptively NAUGHTY to me!*giggles over stupidly**thinks bad things*Uh....I think I have to torture someone now.....*watches Muses scatter*RUN, boys....RUN! *CHASE*~Aku
chui Posted October 25, 2007 Author Posted October 25, 2007 you cheeseball!!! get thy mind out of the gutter!!! although the concept of the sneeze is quite close to the other release this poem is not meant to be about that
VoOs Posted October 25, 2007 Posted October 25, 2007 Mmmm, I like it. I like it VERY much. I LOVE sneeze poetry! Thanks for sharing that beautiful piece!
Sneesee Posted October 25, 2007 Posted October 25, 2007 That was absolutely beautiful, almost made me cry! Thanks for sharing it with us.
Guest iffthelurker Posted October 25, 2007 Posted October 25, 2007 Oh MY! That was LOVELY! Thank you so very much for sharing!
chui Posted October 26, 2007 Author Posted October 26, 2007 eeep! wow...i never would have guessed ya'll would have liked my bit o' poem.... thank you so very much!
Guest Xylaphone Posted October 26, 2007 Posted October 26, 2007 wow...that was deeper than deep.It was so sensual (to put it mildy).I never thought of a sneeze that way. awesome job.
tma Posted October 26, 2007 Posted October 26, 2007 Oooo I liked. That was really good. This is the first sneeze poem that I read that is totally made of WIN.Just beautiful. Thanks for sharing it!
chui Posted October 27, 2007 Author Posted October 27, 2007 thank you guys!! there is something so utterly sensual about sneezing...at least from a fetish point of view....and im glad you can see the image i was portraying...
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