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The uncontrollable model


Fishman44

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Tessa was a rather attractive model. She was a good sized nose, very large breast and a large ass. Her face was arranged perfectly and she had dirty blond hair. Her only flaw was her sneezing. She had a cute CHT sounding sneeze but it was always very messy she also never new when it was coming. She would randomly just explode with 6 uncovered messy sneezes. 
 

An example was when she had been dansing with her contractor when she randomly exploded. CHT CHT CHT CHT CHT right into his face which now has strings of snot hanging from it.

Should I continue?

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Yeah, I should have put more time into it. It has potential but it kinda sucked.

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3 hours ago, Fishman44 said:

Should I continue?

To be honest, it's not like it was a bad story, but it wasn't good either. In my personal opinion, her breasts and ass size as very unimportant. For the sneezing it didn't always need to be capitalized, and you should put the sneeze spellings in quotation marks. You should also put an exclamation mark after each sneeze spelling. Here's an example:
"Cht! Cht! Cht! Cht! Cht!" You spelled "dancing" wrong, and the story was too short. Do all those things, and you've got yourself a potentially great story my friend. I'm trying to post better stories on here too, so let's do our best! 😄

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On 5/13/2020 at 1:12 AM, Fishman44 said:

Should I continue?

You could, but you need to spend more time thinking about what you want to write. Right now, you have an idea (which I, personally, am interested in reading more about), but in order to turn this idea into a story you need a plot and more character depth. A name and a physical description (one that, I must add, reminds me of porn sites tags) are not enough to make a character. Just saying "this is so and so, she looks like this and that and she sneezes a lot" is not really something you can base a story on. Sorry. What makes her sneeze? How is she interacting with other people around her? What does she want to do/ achieve and how does the fact that she's sneezing a lot fit into this? These are just some questions you may want to ask yourself, which could help you move this story forward. Just take your time and think about what you want this story to be like and how you want it to develop. It's O.K. if you don't have all the answers right away, writers often don't. You could always make some parts up as you go along or come up with new ideas. My point is - writing a story takes time and thought, so if you want to be satisfied with your story (and especially if you want other people to like it) you should be willing put some effort into it. That's just my advice :) Good Luck.

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