bben9-kun Posted July 23, 2020 Share Posted July 23, 2020 Well hello there reader! Yes it's me, the long lost writer, who shrouded himself in false hope. I've finally gotten over my writers block, and hoo-boy! Some of you may have seen a story like this a while back, but now it's back, and better than ever! I hope you are all hungry for a corny story idea, that I had back in the day, after reading that one Giant Goddess of Sneezing story. I'm honestly low on idea, so if you want to give ideas for future parts as well, I would LOVE to hear them! Please comment down below on how you felt about this potential masterpiece in the making? Get ready baby! After all, I know a lot more now XD Character Information: Bren: He is a 24 year old African-American male, who wears a green shirt, that drapes all the way to his knees, and tan-colored khaki pants. His shoes are colored black, with the seven Dragon Balls painted on them. (If you don't know what the Dragon Balls look like. They are basically large orange marbles, with stars in them. There are seven of them, and each of them has a different amount of stars. Like the one-star ball, it only has one star in it. If you want a better image in your head, look up "Dragon Ball Z Dragon Balls".) He is "6'0" in height, and his hair color is black. He has curly hair that is braided in the style of Riley Freeman. His iris color is brown. He is above average muscle, and his arms are a bit beefy, but nothing too special. He has trained in the art of being a boxer, and acrobatics for 8 years. He also makes his own video games, and works as a "Game Tester". Anna-mi: She is a 24 year old Caucasian female, who wears a brown dress-like long-sleeve shirt, with sleeves to stretch to an inch past her elbows, light blue jeans, and some black Reebok's. (I couldn't think of some better footwear ._.) She has a slightly larger than average bust size. Her hair is the color of the picture you see below her description. Her iris color is brown as well. She has a slightly skinny hourglass body-type as well. You can find out about her more in the story... In a quiet forest, away from the big city. Bren had been taking a leisurely stroll through an open path among the tall trees, decked out with plenty summer green leaves. He hummed a tune to himself, with his hands in his pockets, thinking about what he should do for the rest of the afternoon. 'Maybe I should re-watch One Piece? Nah, that's like 900 plus episodes...' He thought to himself. He would spot a particularly large tree that seemed to stand out from the others, it had apples spread out all over it's branches, along with some apples that had fallen on the ground. 'Huh, an apple tree out here in the middle of the forest? I wonder who planted this beaut.' He thought to himself, while chuckling softly. He had began to walk over, when a loud noise had startled him in his tracks."Hih-chew!"He took his hands out his pockets, panting softly, trying to catch his breath. His heart had thumped against his chest from the sudden noise, but it wasn't just out of surprise. After taking a moment to regain his posture, and thoughts. He would turn to look in the direction he heard the sudden noise come from. 'Either i'm being a bit too hopeful right now, or...that was a...You know what? Just check it out, Bren. It ain't gonna hurt ya...right?' Bren would think to himself in his head, once again. He would gather his courage, curiosity, and slowly increasing excitement, and start walking in the direction of the "unknown" noise. He would walk under a large group of trees, that had blocked out the sunlight, also hiding his appearance, making him seem like a shadowed over silhouette, due to his skin color as well. He could see a wide opened clearing, like he had reached a center point of the forest, and what he saw in the middle of the open area made him cover his mouth out of complete shock. His eyes were widened as well, trying to contain the squeal of surprise that almost broke free from his mouth. Right there in the center of the clearing, had been a unquestionably, tall, and VERY beautiful giantess, rubbing her small, dainty noise, while sniffling softly. Bren had finally calmed himself down, although seeing the giantess rubbing her nose, made his heartbeat accelerate, and it almost made him blush. He hid behind a tree, and peeked at the giantess from behind it. 'No way...NO WAY!!' He thought to himself. The giantess, would stop rubbing her nose after a short moment, her nose troubles finished for now. At least, that's what Bren thought. Right as she had removed her finger, her nose would twitch, and wiggle around, along with her nostrils starting to flare. Her breath would hitch softly, and her chest would heave. Her head started to rear back as well."Hiiiiih.....Hiiiiiiiih.....Hiiiiiiiiih!"Bren would look on, his heart now pounding against his chest out of anticipation. The build-up was breath-taking. It was something had hadn't ever seen in his entire lifetime, and if he were to die, after she finally unleashed the impending sneeze, he wouldn't have any regrets. Bren would chuckle to himself, while clenching his fist out of joy. 'Yes! Yes! YES!!' He said in his head. Even though he was excited to see the impending sneeze that was building within the giant, he had his eyes closed, sweating nervously. After another short-round of hitching, he opened his eyes. Upon him opening his eyes, he saw her snap forward, unleashing as well as producing a powerful gust, but soft-sounding uncovered sneeze. One that un-lodged a few trees from their roots in the ground, and sent them toppling forward. She did spray a few of the remaining trees with snot, and some spray."Hiiiih....Hih-chew!!"The giantess would rub her eyes, and started to rub her nose a bit vigorously once again after she finished rubbing her eyes. She would sniffle softly, trying to catch her breath."Bless you!", said Bren from his hiding spot in the shade of the trees. It came out, as a force of habit, and need of interaction. He would quickly cover his mouth, and hide behind the tree, to try and mask his presence, and make it seem like he had escaped. The bless you had instantly caught the giantesses ear, causing her eyes to widen slightly out of surprise, along with a soft blush crossing her cheeks, slightly, and whip her head in the direction she heard the bless you come from. She had saw Bren's silhouette briefly, before he had hidden behind the tree. She was silent for a moment, staring at the spot she saw Bren, and turned away. She would grab a few flowers from the small group of flowers in front of her, with her left hand. She held the flowers over her right hand, shaking out a large amount of pollen particles into her right hand. She would sniffle softly in the process, the pollen in her hand already getting to her nose. She held her right hand up to her nose, preforming a gentle sniff, the pollen particles flying into her nose. It would work like a charm, her nose already twitching, and wiggling around violently once again. Allergic tears started to flow from her eyes, while her breath would hitch. Her chest would heave, bouncing softly with her hitching breaths in a combined sneeze-building rhythm. Through her right eye, despite allergic tears flowing from it. She saw Bren's silhouette peak out from behind the tree, confirming her earlier glimpse of him, that she had caught. Though she did not know what he looked like completely, she could tell that he must have been watching her earlier, when she sneezed. Her eyes would finally shut, as she snapped forward, unleashing a small volley of built-up allergy sneezes."Hiiih...Hiiiih! Hih-chew! Hih-shew! Hih-chhsh! Hah-chiew!"She would sneeze openly, the pollen she sniffed, shooting from her nose like a trapped, and cluttered group of allergens would. She sprayed the ground in front of her, along with the group of flowers she had been sitting in front of. Her nose, was dripping slightly with a small amount of snot. She would sniffle, and cover her right hand with her sleeve. She wiped the snot away with her sleeve-covered hand, and sniffled once again. Bren would had watched the entire scene, his heart just thumping, and beating against his chest, like he had just witnessed paradise. He had a blush across his cheeks, unknowingly wandering closer towards the giantess out of habit. As he approached her, he was walking through some bushes, causing a lot rustling sound to effortlessly alert the giantess of his slow approach. She would turn, and reach out to grab Bren with her left hand, grabbing him by his waist. Bren, finally snapping back to his sense, turned the other direction, in an attempt to run away, but he had already been grabbed by the giantess, after taking 3 steps. The giantess would hold Bren up to her face, looking at him with a look of curiosity. She had blush on her cheeks, but it wasn't one of embarrassment. She had then opened her hand, holding him, and examining his appearance completely, while sniffling softly. Bren on the other hand, was starting to become overtaken by fear, which was unlike him. "S-So, I just thought I should let you know. I'm...not really tasty!", he said his voice tone a little shaken by fear. The giantess would giggle softly, and rest her head in her free hand. "I know, I would say...you're sort of cute instead.", she spoke in a gentle, calm, and friendly voice tone, with another soft giggle at the end of her sentence.To be continued...Welp! What'cha think boyos, and girl-o's? That was Part 1 re-rewritten with better writing experience. I hope you all hunger for more, because as a bonus, I will also re-write this story, as to how it originally went, with better grammar, and writing! Let me know of anything that may not make sense, and i'll explain what I meant in the comments down below. Part 2 coming, depending on reception. This took longer than I thought, bwaha! Remember to comment and follow this story! Links to the other versions of the story down below! For now, bben9 signing off! Warps awayF.Y.I: If you want me to re-write some of my old stories, because why not, just comment down below about that too, and i'll even link those too! Old Story Versions: My Other Stories: Link to comment
Zracken3 Posted July 23, 2020 Share Posted July 23, 2020 Aw, heck yeah! The Brendan and Anname stories are some of my most favorite ever, and I'm super happy to see them getting a revival. Of course, I'll take anything giantess related. I'm also very impressed by how much the quality of the writing has been improved from the earlier versions. There's so much more description and scene-setting, and the sentences are much more complex and varied. There's still grammatical things that could be worked on, but, content-wise, this is a huge leap forward! So, whatever you've been doing to improve, keep at it! As for suggestions for future parts, let me see... Not a plot suggestion, but a style one. Some people might disagree with me, but I like it when writers use BIG LETTERS for big sneezes. So, maybe that's something you could incorporate in Part 2. Now, for plot suggestions, I liked in the earlier stories when Brendan would frequently interact with Anname's sneezes either by being sneezed on directly or just falling off of her shoulder or something. Another idea might be to have Anna-mi in a situation where she doesn't want to sneeze, forcing her to holdback. Bren could help out with that perhaps. Or maybe the opposite is true; maybe Anna-mi wants to sneeze for some reason, and Bren has to help her get it out. Let me know what you think! I know how bad writer's block sucks, so I'm more than happy to keep bouncing ideas around. Once again, loving this so far! Link to comment
bben9-kun Posted July 23, 2020 Author Share Posted July 23, 2020 3 minutes ago, Zracken3 said: Aw, heck yeah! The Brendan and Anname stories are some of my most favorite ever, and I'm super happy to see them getting a revival. Of course, I'll take anything giantess related. I'm also very impressed by how much the quality of the writing has been improved from the earlier versions. There's so much more description and scene-setting, and the sentences are much more complex and varied. There's still grammatical things that could be worked on, but, content-wise, this is a huge leap forward! So, whatever you've been doing to improve, keep at it! As for suggestions for future parts, let me see... Not a plot suggestion, but a style one. Some people might disagree with me, but I like it when writers use BIG LETTERS for big sneezes. So, maybe that's something you could incorporate in Part 2. Now, for plot suggestions, I liked in the earlier stories when Brendan would frequently interact with Anname's sneezes either by being sneezed on directly or just falling off of her shoulder or something. Another idea might be to have Anna-mi in a situation where she doesn't want to sneeze, forcing her to holdback. Bren could help out with that perhaps. Or maybe the opposite is true; maybe Anna-mi wants to sneeze for some reason, and Bren has to help her get it out. Let me know what you think! I know how bad writer's block sucks, so I'm more than happy to keep bouncing ideas around. Once again, loving this so far! Keeshishishi! Thanks for the LOVELY comment Zracken! I never knew you were a fan of the original versions! As for the big sneeze thing, don't worry homie! I got'chu! I didn't use big letters, because her little sneezles were small ones, but in the next installment, there will be big gorl snz. :3. I'm about to post a revamped B & J story soon, so look forward to it! I also will take your ideas into account! Link to comment
Zracken3 Posted July 23, 2020 Share Posted July 23, 2020 1 minute ago, bben9 said: Keeshishishi! Thanks for the LOVELY comment Zracken! I never knew you were a fan of the original versions! As for the big sneeze thing, don't worry homie! I got'chu! I didn't use big letters, because her little sneezles were small ones, but in the next installment, there will be big gorl snz. :3. I'm about to post a revamped B & J story soon, so look forward to it! I also will take your ideas into account! You're welcome; I'm much newer to the forum, so I was never able to post on the originals, but, yes, definitely a fan. And my mistake with the letters thing, but, I have to say, if these were the "little sneezles," then I'm super excited for the "big gorl snz." I'll take a look at the other story too when you post it, though I may not have as much to say since giantess is my wheelhouse. :P And thank you for considered my suggestions! Link to comment
Glatissant Posted July 24, 2020 Share Posted July 24, 2020 Great fic - I hadn't seen the originals til now but I love the detailed descriptions in the revamp! Link to comment
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