sneezes Posted July 11, 2010 Share Posted July 11, 2010 Danielle had a rubbish immune system she was always catching colds but this one really hit her hand. She woke up Saturday morning and stifled a sneeze into her hand, and groaned, She caught another one. She then sneezed more times. She stifled 2 in her hand and loud for the third one, snot flew everywhere. She threw a tissue over her face and wiped her nose and blew it quitely. 2 mins later she grabbed another tissue and blew her nose it took her a lot to clear her nose she then threw the tissue in the bin. She got dressed and showered as she was going shopping with her friend, who was going to pick her up. 15 mins after getting dressed her firend turned up and they went. Danielle rubbed her nose vigorusly trying to remove the itch, it didnt work she sneezed into her hand. She had bought tissues with her she pulled some out and blew her congested nose and put the tissue up her sleeve. Her friend Gabby turned round and said u feelin alright?. No danielle said i have a stinker of a cold. She wiped her nose with her tissue. She then pulled out her tissue again, and blew her nose again. She had put a kitchen roll in her bag she pulled off a bit and blew her nose, it made a thick wet noise she then left it 15 mins and blew again!Part 2 what do you think? Link to comment
sneezes Posted August 30, 2011 Author Share Posted August 30, 2011 part 2:They had just got to the shopping centre, when danielle stepped out of the car, and had a stifled sneezed fit of 9, sneezes in quick time, she gave a congested sniff and sighed. She pulled out some nasal spray from her bag, used it, and put it back in her bag, and sniffled. As they were walking along, danielle sneezed constantly, and they were strong wet sneezes. When danielle spoke her voice was clearly filled with congestion, gabby felt sorry for her, as she saw that danielle felt really rough. Danielle was in a permanent state of sneeze, and her nose was congested so much. They sat down for a minute and danielle launched into a huge sneeze attack, which left her in a state. They sat an had something to eat, danielle sneezed again, and then gave her nose a snotty honk. She then spent the next hour sneezing and blowing her nose Link to comment
CDK114 Posted August 30, 2011 Share Posted August 30, 2011 Pretty good! But you should use quotation marks for spoken language. . . Link to comment
sneezes Posted August 30, 2011 Author Share Posted August 30, 2011 Part 3:They had finished shopping, and got back into the car, when danielle erupted into another long messy sneeze fit, which were sneezed into tissue, she sighed, and sniffled. They got back to Gabby's where, they had some coffee and talked. Danielle excused herself, and went to the bathroom, she went to the toilet, and had a coughing fit, and then gave her nose a snotty blow. While she was in there, she sneezed another fit, and have her nose some honking nose blows, which gabby had heard. She went back downstairs and contiuned to talk with gabby. While they were talking, an itch had got stuck in danielle's nose, she blowed her nose trying to remove the itch, but that wouldnt work, she tried that 3 times, she kept rubbing her nose, and finally after a few minutes the sneeze finally came. Link to comment
CDK114 Posted August 30, 2011 Share Posted August 30, 2011 Niiice! Can you spell out the sneezes next time? Link to comment
sneezes Posted August 30, 2011 Author Share Posted August 30, 2011 yh no worries... lol this is the most feedback i have ever had on one of my stories thanks Link to comment
sneezes Posted September 2, 2011 Author Share Posted September 2, 2011 Part 4:They contiuned to sit and talk, when danielle, softly blew her congested nose, you could hear mucus fill the tissue. She then sneezed a wet sneeze into the tissue and groaned. She then softly blew her nose again. Gabby handed her a fresh toilet roll, danielle thanked her, immediatly tore off a bit and blew her nose again. They started talking again, then danielle tore off another bit and blew her nose again. The congestion wouldnt budge. Once again they contiuned talking, danielle tore off some more tissue, and held the tissue in her hand, and waited for a sneeze.... after about 5 seconds it came, straight into the tissue. Followed up with another blow of the nose. They had been speaking for a while now, and gabby noticed, danielle's voice getting worse. It was filled with congestion and she didnt look well. Over the space of a minute, she sneezed 4 more harsh sneezes, this time into her hand. Her throat hurt she felt achy, and just felt like crap. She reached for more tissue, and gave her congested nose another blow. Gabby went to the kitchen, to get them a drink, and while she was there, she sneezed, and thought to herself 'crap i hope im not getting sick'. She came back into the room, and saw danielle tear off a huge bit of toilet roll, and saw her give her congested nose another blow, her nose was red and sore. Straight after she sat on the couch and sneezed twice into her hand. Gabby erupted into a sneeze fit, which was followe by sniffling. She wiped her nose with a tissue and sniffled. She then followed it up with a couple more sneezes. Danielle sneezed again, and gabby blessed her. Danielle had to blow her nose agian. It was giving her a headahce. She followed it up with 2 more nose blows, the snottiest ones she had done all day Link to comment
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